First and Last Paragraphs

Clifford Thurlow is the author of Operation Jihadi Bride Clifford Thurlow is the author of more than 20 books

I have put off writing this piece for some time because I couldn't think of a first paragraph. In this I detect a common dilemma.

Reading through a collection of short stories recently, I realised that several were rather good – except for the first paragraph, the one sculpted to such perfection it said nothing at all. Think of a Barbie Doll and you get the picture.

The first paragraph is a sickness. It is where the writer feels the urge to show brilliance, this siren call reminding me of Samuel Johnson's haunting counsel: Read through your work. When you come to a part that's particularly pleasing, strike it out.

I can't say that I fully subscribe to this viewpoint, but it's scribbled on a Post-it beside my desk nonetheless.

Last paragraphs can be just as troublesome. It's the one where we feel tempted to tie up loose ends like untied shoelaces.

Writers don’t live in a vacuum. We write to be read. Stories can take any obtuse tangent, but the first concern must be to communicate and, by extension, to entertain. Be obscure, but clearly.

In a novel, there is time and space for a range of ideas and mood swings, an understanding between the author and his readers that a new world is being revealed. Short stories and articles must grab the reader immediately and hold his attention. It is strange but true that some short story writers can't write novels and some novelists fail utterly with their short stories.

A lot of mainstream fiction is formulaic and predictable. It is the rebels of self-publishing and the web who find the courage to experiment, to carry the fire through the darkness like mediaeval troubadours. But writers fail in their mission when substance is outweighed by cleverness. Stream of consciousness passages may floor us by the power of their beauty. Like Belgian chocolate, though, a little goes a long way.

Surrealism and fantasy are in vogue, but the rules of good fiction remain fixed and only when you know the rules can you rearrange them to suit yourself. When a writer reaches that level of expertise, he can then take Jean Cocteau's advice: Listen to first criticisms of your work. Note just what it is that critics don't like – then cultivate it. That's the part of your work that's individual and worth keeping.

Writers must strive for individuality while following in the footsteps of all the writers who have gone before them. Painters follow another path; composers their own, juggling the same meagre set of crotchets and quavers until they dazzle with something sparkling and new. This is not plagiarism, unless for writers reading is plagiarism, and no writer gets to be a good writer without following these three essential tips: read, read, read.

It is often said that analysis deadens appreciation. Whilst this may be true, it does not apply to the analysis of your own work. Stories should be read many times before you can honestly say you're satisfied. It's a good idea to read aloud. If you pause for anything other than breath, pity the poor reader and put the coffee on. It's going to be a long night.

One of the awful things about writing (apart from the isolation, rejection, poverty and not knowing what to say when strangers ask what you do) is that no matter how good we think a piece is, there's a part of us which believes it could be better.

That's why we keep going. No one knows why we do it and, when we've done it, more often than not, nobody wants it. But writers have to write and we must always seek to make what we are writing as good as it can possibly be.

Reading through, I see I don't need the first paragraph. Or the last.


Jihadi Bride by Clifford Thurlow

My new book Operation Jihadi Bride, written with ex-soldier John Carney, came out in July. It contains four chilling predictions. The first has come to pass: The United States has pulled out of Syria leaving a power vacuum filled by Turkey.

This will follow: 2—the escape of ISIS prisoners; 3—the start of a new terrorist Caliphate in North Africa; 4—a humanitarian crisis and the greatest flood of refugees to Europe in history.

“Terrifying,” The Times. “Things are not worse than we imagine. They are worse than we can imagine.”

Buy it here.

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